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PostSubject: Faust DarkHeart (Approved)   Sat Jun 19, 2010 5:29 am

Name: Faust DarkHeart

Age: 201

Visual Age: 33

Gender: Male

Rank: Espada

Appearance:
Faust appears to be a regular man with a black ponytail and deep purple eyes. He is well toned, with a rock-hard six-pack and powerful limbs. He stands at 6'3" and weighs 200lbs. He has very broad shoulders.

Faust has retained some of the inky black substance that made him up as a Hollow in the form of a black tribal tattoo spanning His entire upper torso/chest and upper back as well as his shoulders. It sometimes moves around during battle or if he is particularly agitated.
His mask fragment forms a full glove over his left hand. While the glove appears solid and unbroken, it moves malleably and does not impede Faust's hand movement. The back of the glove is separated lengthwise by a straight crimson line. The right half is white, the left half is black. On his palm, there is a crimson Pentagram.

On his back, he has a tattoo which is shaped like a gravestone and bears the words "R.I.P. In Memory Of: Never Show Thy Enemies Love". He made this tattoo by carving the words on stone and heating it up with a wave of Reiryoku. His Hollow hole is located at the base of his neck. It is about the size of a tennis ball. His Septima Espada tattoo is on the back of his left eyeball, which he can cause to roll back in his socket - thus revealing the tatto - at will.

Faust wears a pristine version of the Espada uniform. He has replaced the black obi with a purple one and opted for black jika-tabi rather than the sandals or boots generally worn. He wears no shirt beneath the white coat of the uniform, showing off his impressive pectoral and abdominal muscles. The coat itself consists of three layers. The outer layer is soft white leather. The inner layer is body armor which can stand up to unreleased blades and minor damage, very similar to Kevlar. The inner layer is a lining of black satin trimmed with crimson silk and embroidered with purple silk diamonds on the bottom. These diamonds look exactly like the ones on a Captain's Haori, but they only outlined with purple silk, not filled in with it, and they are on the inside rather than the outside.

Personality:
Faust is a quiet person. He has an extreme lust for power and is constantly looking for the strongest opponent to fight. He will often ignore anyone he finds weak, thinking that they are just a waste of existence. He considers the Hollows and all Arrancar beneath Espada level to be less than trash. He feels that they don't deserve to be living, but doesn't consider himself the executioner. He is calm but serious. His temper is deadly, but he has a relatively long fuse. He is not usually amused by jokes, and rarely smiles. Since abondoning his allegiance to all other powers, his only duty is to wander the vast deserts of Hueco Mundo. All around he is calm, but deadly. His emotionless facade hides his true nature, that of unwavering calculation and inexorable force. When necessary, he does not hesitate to kill.
He is a casual smoker, though how he manages to procure cigarettes is quite the mystery.

He is calm and collected, preferring logic to rash action, even when he sometimes seems to be acting rashly - namely in pursuit of power. Normally, that's just a facade to hide how deeply he's planned the encounter. If you disrespect him, he will put you back in your place. He is very analytical as well as being very intellectual and scientific, following his plans down to the finest detail. He has a variety of methods for analyzing an opponent's abilities, such as studying the damage done to their former opponents. He has shown himself to be a powerful and flexible tactician, capable of adjusting seamlessly to any given combat situation.

Faust is fond of long, complicated, and somewhat convoluted plots. He is a powerful strategist, capable of formulating well thought-out plans. These plans are deeply involved by their very nature; they are detailed and planned out with the long term in mind. He is masterful when it comes to plans within plans, and his patience is usually hard to beat.

On many occasions when he meets others and is in a good enough mood to deign to carry a conversation, he is shown to be witty and filled with knowledge…although he rarely reveals his wisdom in an easily interpretable manner.
Faust has a habit of sometimes referring to himself as "Ore-Sama" ("Myselfship") in self-effacing irony.

Fighting Style:
Faust normally begins with attacks not meant to actually harm his opponent, but to allow him to study their abilities. Once he has grasped them, he begins to think of ways to counter them and render them useless. Even in purely physical combat, he analyzes his opponent's style of fighting so that he can attempt to use it against them. He recognizes the fact that ninety percent of battle of mental. If you can convince the enemy that they cannot win, it ultimately becomes a self-fulfilling prophecy. Let them tie the noose around their own neck, then kick away the chair when they have. When fighting multiple opponents, he tries to turn their abilities against them. If he's fighting a ranged fighter and a melee fighter, he'll do everything to make himself an open target, then attack the melee fighter in just such a way that places them in the line of fire. Such an attack usually turns out to be a feint, with the real attack coming at the ranged fighter - after they have fired at and incapacitated their own comrade, of course. The goal is to make even the most congruent of fighters be unable to fight in conjunction. Then dig one big hole, one time.

Background:
Faust was born in 1810 A.D. Back then, his name was Khentimentu.
He remembers none of his Human life...perhaps that's his modesty, stopping his ego from expanding. You see, before he was an Arrancar, he was first a Hollow. Yet before all of that, he was an Egyptian.

Khentimentu was an officer in one of Mahamet Ali's armies. He was very distinguished and his bravery and valor were well know. To Ali's supporters, he was a hero.

However, it was as it is with all "Heroes": They either die a "Hero" or live long enough to see themselves become a "Villain". Khentimentu experienced the former.
During the ferocious invasion of Syria, Khentimentu was killed. He died surrounded by - literally, up to his knees! - the warriors he had vanquished. The turmoil of battle and anger that he felt as he was yanked from the prime of his life tormented him endlessly. He watched the battle for three full days before angrily ripping out his Chain of Fate with the intent to leap into the fray. All of his anger caused him to change into a Hollow, a change that was almost instantaneous. In this newfound form, Khentimentu ravaged the enemy forces. The Egyptians won, but they returned home haunted by visions of men being ripped apart and eaten by some unseen enemy. Khentimentu, also, returned home. But not to Khentimentu's home, for that was no longer who he was. He was the Scourge; his home was Hueco Mundo.

Khentimentu was born and bred as a Leader, so it should come as no surprise that his consciousness re-emerged again and again as the dominant persona of his new form. It was easy enough to utilize his former warrior abilities to dominate the lesser Hollows around him.

He started as a lowly beginner, devouring small, weak souls that had somehow ended up in Hueco Mundo. Perhaps they had gotten lost on their journey to the Soul Society; perhaps they were the forgotten remnants of a Hollow's would-be meal, escaped while the Hollow fought one of its fellows. It didn't matter; they were a stepping stone for him to gain enough strength to begin devouring Lesser Hollows, then average Hollows, then up to Menos, Gillian and, finally, Adjuchas. By the time he reached 100 years as a Hollow, he was an Adjuchas himself. He fought his way to the top in Death in the same way he had in Life.

Khentimentu began taking trips to Earth. He started with Humans, then moved on to Spiritually Aware Humans...then patrolling Shinigami. Yet he began to find that nothing satisfied his hunger anymore. He returned to Hueco Mundo, where he killed and devoured many, many Hollows a day. The amountgrew and grew. One day, he awoke from a killing frenzy to find that he was no longer the inky black demon he had been. He looked almost like a Human. He didn't know it then, but he had become a Vasto Lorde.

It was not long after this that Khentimentu heard of Bracamarte Experto. He immediately determined to find him. He sought him out and asked him if it were true that he could make a Hollow into a being more powerful than any ordinary Hollow. Experto studied him for a while, seeing if there was any way for him to increase his power before Shinigamification. Seeing that there was no more progress to made besides Shinigamification, Experto used his power on him. He was turned into an Arrancar and became the Septima Espada, though his power was more akin to a Quinto. He changed his name to Faust DarkHeart. Now, he searches for powerful Arrancar to defeat and absorb in the hopes that he will rise to a high rank and serve at the right hand of Experto. He holds no ambition to rival Experto. His lot in life - well, the afterlife - is to serve, and be the best soldier in Experto's army.


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PostSubject: Re: Faust DarkHeart (Approved)   Sat Jun 19, 2010 5:32 am

I realize the History is somewhat long. All you really need to read are the first paragraph and the last five paragraphs (and like three of those are pretty short, so it shouldn't be too bad. Sorry if I bore you.).
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PostSubject: Re: Faust DarkHeart (Approved)   Sat Jun 19, 2010 11:51 am

TOOO OLLLDDDD!!!!

First off, there is almost nothing that has lived that existed during the first spiritual war 3000 years ago.. That would screw things up.

Second, Bracamarte has only been the Primera for about 60-70 year now. The Espada were only formed during that time.

Third, a quick glance at the middle made me gag. If a hollow has been purified, they don't retain some weird part of their original hollow side that could take them over or something like that. That doesn't even make much sense even if you try to pass it by with the split personality thing. Even if he had a split personality, that wouldn't keep it safe from being purified.

Fourth, you basically controlled Bracamarte in your bio. If you want all that stuff, (which a good deal of it is against how the Primera would act), then talk to him. Don't expect much though.

Fifth, AGEEEEE!!!!!!!! If he had trained for thousands of years, he would be the most powerful being around. Flat out, no exceptions. Not happening.

My recommendation? Complete and total rewrite of your backstory. I haven't even looked at the rest of the profile yet because fixing the backstory is top priority.
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PostSubject: Re: Faust DarkHeart (Approved)   Sat Jun 19, 2010 3:29 pm

(1) I don't see how. Look a the time he w in El Vacio...he went in way before the Great Spiritual War and came out after it.

(2) Problematic. I'll re-write.

(3) Fine with Me, I'll re-write.

(4) I'll PM him after I finish the re-writes.

(5) He trained for thousands of years as Khentimentu. Since then, he changed entities twice. Just because he did it in a previous life doesn't mean he can access those memories or still have the muscle memory. That's what these are, by the way: previous lives that in one way or another affect his current situation. So technically, he's only 201. Not to mention that his History says what power level he is currently at.

I'll reply again once I've made the necessary changes.
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PostSubject: Re: Faust DarkHeart (Approved)   Sat Jun 19, 2010 11:06 pm

Most of the changes seem satisfactory, but I still have an issue about the paragraph or two about him being taken by Bracamarte and turned into a powerful Arrancar and then mysteriously losing all of that power. To me, this seems just overly complicated and doesn't really add to the profile as a whole. I'm fine with the rest of the profile, but until that part's taken care of, I won't approve the character.

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PostSubject: Re: Faust DarkHeart (Approved)   Sat Jun 19, 2010 11:57 pm

Alright, you were a good sport with the changes which always gets extra points with me. Maybe one or two things I don't completely like but they are minor so not going to complain about them. They are all at the beginning of your backstory anyways so it doesn't have too much bearing on the plot in the end.

Unless someone makes a valid point.

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PostSubject: Re: Faust DarkHeart (Approved)   Mon Jun 21, 2010 7:56 pm

You really were a good sport about the changes and about hearing the staff's opinions. I wish we had more new members like you who can take constructive criticism.

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