Maru

Name: Maru Hakushii

Age: 13

Years Since Gaining Superhuman Powers: 9

Gender: Male

Current Location: Human World

Occupation: Pillaging From Random Places...Arrow-Smith (for those who need arrows)

Rank: None

Appearance:


Personality: Maru is a 13-year-old feral boy who stubbornly believes he is a prince. He's also a kickass little bastard in battles. Maru has a scary voodoo mask that he sometimes wears either when he wants to intimidate someone or if he's feeling dejected. He also wears an oversized crown around his neck, which he believes to be absolute proof of his being a prince.

Around people he is generally sociopathic, and he acts above others, though desperate in reality. He generally wants friends.

Fighting Style: As a skilled archer, he wields a huge bow with a spinning weathercock attached to it, and a neverending supply of arrows. He uses his powers to materialize them.

Background: His past is dark. Like several other stories, Maru was lost to a family. However, his survival was more like an accident. Around the age of 4, his powers kicked in to a minor extent. He attained strong psychic powers, but with this, he predicted a future of war for his home-country. Blood gushing everywhere. For that reason he sealed up this power and never used it again.

For the reason of treason and heresy, he was banished at the age of 4. He was forced to live through taking from people, and desperate hunting. This forced his mind to attune to nature and made him accurate. Living this way left him with hardly any memory of his past. His initial powers seemed to have nothing to do with spirits.

Now to his current powers linked to spirits. He tripped. And fell down, accidentally falling down towards eminent doom. However, he was saved by a passing rogue shinigami. That contact forced superhuman traits into him. He lives as he has been living and continues as such.

Hmm... Is this a finished profile? If so, then it leaves a lot to be desired.

Well, the age is a problem. The minimum age for a character on this site is 18 years old. I don't believe that is in the templates, but that's how we'd prefer the minimum age to be.

The profile is incredibly sparse, with no description of your character's appearance and only 3 sentences to describe his personality, 2 of which actually describe his appearance. To me, it is incredibly lacking in detail.

And for the information that IS present, it is quite confusing and random. Just to let you know, this site does take place in the 21st Century (2020, I believe). I'm not sure how your character could be an arrow-smith then.

And then we get to your... abilities. So he has psychic powers that let him see into his future, but at the same time he has a huge bow with which he can shoot materialized arrows? Those two abilities have no correlation with each other. I'd prefer having one or another, but definitely not both.

I am not sure how he could be banished at the age of 4 for "treason and heresy." How would people know that he could see the future at the age of 4, to warrant such a banishment? Where was he born and raised where this kind of thing happens in modern times?

Overall, it seems that you didn't read the template and just tried to jump into the rp. This profile is a mess, to be blunt. It tells me very little about your character, and what little I DO know about him only gives me a headache. You'd probably do best to just start over again.

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